Today in class I finally came up with a legitimate argument for my paper. I honestly had to change it five times to finally find one that I was satisfied with. I changed my thesis three times today in class alone. With this argument I believe that I can make my real world connection a lot better, and argue something that I actually do agree with instead of just making an argument just to complete an English paper. The only downfall is I will pretty much have to start my entire paper over in order to match it up with my new thesis statement.
My thesis is as follows. Buffy’s necessity to kill in order to serve justice, and protect the lives of others is represented by people’s American rights and licenses to kill, which is set up to make today’s environment a safer place for all.
This thesis will give me a lot more examples that come from the Buffy the Vampire Slayer series. I think that the entire series will b able to fit in with the argument that I am making. I am also able to better tie in the real world example which is American’s rights and licenses to kill. This is displayed through self defense if someone’s life is in danger, and the licenses to kill that police officers, executioners, and military men contain. After speaking with one of my peers, he told me that I should expand a bit more on the first statement of my thesis statement about Buffy having the necessity to kill. I’m not too sure yet on how I can expand on it, but I think I will figure it out by tomorrow. If anyone has any ideas, please let me know. It would be much appreciated.
I wonder if you might be able to tie in all of this stuff going on in my part of the state about having the right to carry a concealed weapon if you take a 10 hour class? I know if I took a class like that I would still not want someone like me to be carrying around a concealed weapon!
ReplyDeleteLeeAnn that is actually a pretty good idea. I think I will add that to my paper. It ties in perfectly witht the argument that I am making. I do undestand what your saying about not wanting to carry around a concealed weapon even though you took the class. It's a scary weapon!
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